[Whisper]

Grrr. You win. I went over this for like 5 minutes trying to find some aspect of it that failed to meet the qualifications for a sonnet, but you met them all. :D

[Kidbomber]

Thanks guys again means alot being this was the first one i ever wrote. (Also to being I learned what a sonnet was on the same day i wrote this lol)

[Orangeremi]

Originally Posted by Kidbomber

Multiply by love and divided by lives,

Just the smallest grammar nitpick, as I can't help you improve on the poetry/artistic side of things, multiply is in present tense, while divided is in past tense. You might want to change them to be more compatible, though it isn't necessary. That is if it doesn't mess up flow, syllables, or what you actually meant to put. Otherwise, I really enjoyed reading it, and was quite surprised that it was your first.

[Kidbomber]

Originally Posted by Orangeremi

Just the smallest grammar nitpick, as I can't help you improve on the poetry/artistic side of things, multiply is in present tense, while divided is in past tense. You might want to change them to be more compatible, though it isn't necessary. That is if it doesn't mess up flow, syllables, or what you actually meant to put. Otherwise, I really enjoyed reading it, and was quite surprised that it was your first.

They were like that for a reason. Multiply by love (meaning we have each other now) and divided by lives (we are divided/separated by completely different families and different rulings)

Thats why i wrote it that way.