Hey,
I can see you're having a few problems embeding some pictures in your map post. For mine, I used Haloscreenshots.net which made things REALLY easy to embed your screenshots directly without having to upload them to a website such as photobucket. You can find out how to use it
HERE. Or I can see that you've posted links to photobucket image so maybe this tutorial by
xX5w33ny70ddXx would be more suitable for you:
Embed screenshots with photobucket.
Also, you need to include a link for your map variant which you can find on bungie.net so that people can actually download your map.
This has to be a link to the map on the bungie forums instead of your fileshare.
I hope this helps, if you have any more questions feel free to just ask :)
Looking forward to seeing what your map is like + your post improve :D